My links are:
1. CSI: Miami
In this story, Horatio, the protagonist has finished a night run and cools off on the beach across his condo where he lives. He is taken hostage by a anonymous group of men and taken to a some what prison cell where he believes he has no hope of escaping. However, Horatio, having no badge, gun or his cell phone to try contact his team as well as being drugged, he finds the strength with in him, using what he has on him to leave traces for his team of his whereabouts. He then feels around the cell for any clues to where he is held hostage. His hands tied, he is able to free his wrists and slowly finds his way to the bed provided and rests.
The story worked well catching the readers attention in the first paragraph. Throughout the story, the writer begins to explain too much of what is happening and therefore confuses the reader. It is clear to us that Horatio is taken hostage but it is not clear where he was taken hostage from, the author mentions something about the beach where Horatio rested but does not clearly explain this. She includes that Horatio can not see and refers that it is pitch black, but why is it pitch black? Is he blind folded or have something over his head? There could be many reasons why it is pitch black but she does not tells the reader. There is also some parts within this story that seems quite odd such as Horatio finding a bucket to pee?? As well as sucking his blood after freeing his hands from being tied behind him. However, it is clear that Horatio is taken hostage without his team knowing and the author also descriptively describes the characters and their movements.2. The Simpsons
3. The Mentalist
In this story, Simon Baker who plays Patrick Jane is kept in a basement together with another character from the series. This story is based on the series 1 finale and what could have happen if senior agent Teresa Lisbon had not shown up to save Jane and Mya. The shierff threatens Jane mentioning that he will have fun doing what ever he has in mind for his two hostages. In the original series Lisbon shows up in the end with the CBI (California Bureau of Investigation) to save Jane and Mya, but in this story the author leaves the reader to ponder on what would have happen if Lisbon did not show up.
This story works well because it keeps the reader thinking about the situation that the characters are in and what would have happen if Lisbon did not show up. Not only did they write this Fan Fiction but they also include the reader to ponder on the question "what if...". They did well explaining Patrick Jane's reaction to the situation and letting the reader know how he felt descriptively.
4. Body Of Proof
In this story Megan, the protagonist, is overwhelmed by the return of her phsyco ex-boyfriend James Thorne. He has threatened to kidnap Megan and kill her due to a bad break up. Megan is told to stay with fellow co-worker, Officer Peter, but she denies his offer and due to her decisions she is kidnapped from her office by James and faces being delt to by him. In the end the whole Body of Proof team is forced to find Megan, resulting in one of the members getting shot, Megan's daughter Lacey being kidnapped as well and James killing everyone Megan loves before he kills the women that broke his heart 10 years ago, Megan Hunt.
In this story, the author does a very good job describing the plot, scene and the characters. The story is very well written and makes you hope that the team will find Megan. The action happening in this story is described will by the author and makes you join in the hype in a way. The only thing I did not like is that the author decided to make the villan, James Thorne, to kill Megan and the team. There is no victory at the end of the story. Maybe the author knows that everyone will expect a happy ending so she decides to take them by suprise and give an unexpected ending.
5. The Ghost Whisperer
In this story Melinda Gordon, The ghost whisperer, is shaken by the girl next door. Their son Aiden is seen talking to this girl, Aylana, where Melinda mistakens for a ghost. Aylana, introduces herself and lets the couple know that she is the new owner of the haunted house next door. They come to know that Aylana knows more than they think abou the abilites Melinda and her son Aiden have and the situation the family is in.
This story works well because the author makes it sound very real to the point where you can actually picture what they are telling. They describe the scene very clear and merges the characters together and has you wanting more. The storyline goes very well with the series 'Ghost Whisperer' and includes very interesting moments that makes your feelings bubble. A very good read overall.

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ReplyDeleteThanks Cee-Cee (:
Deletewow i like how you clearly described what the story was about, great work!! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. I have to say, it wasn't easy. Haha
DeleteI like how you clearly and appropriately summarized each fan-fiction story. Your critiques are well written and from the way you summarized each story I found that I would have agreed on each of your critiques. You outlined each story well and was enjoyable to see your own take on the stories.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarah.
DeleteGreat summarization, and I liked how you offered your own thoughts too, instead of just agreeing with everything the author did. Really good critiques :)
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you very much. I hope to keep it up with the drafts and my final.
DeleteYour critique is quite astounding. Really appreciate someone who knows how to articulate their opinions and thoughts without taking away from the overall summarization. Well done. looking forward to checking out your fanfic..
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind words. I hope I can keep it up with my final.
DeleteReally great work Nia! You have described your summaries in great detail. It's very easy to read and I enjoyed reading through them. Also great critiquing on the writer's fan fiction. Looking forward to your fan fiction and what you choose to do it on.
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