Based on 'The Mentalist' Television series. Using one of my fan fiction links about the TV series as the core inspiration of my narrative/first brief.
Style:- Detective Fiction/ Detective Drama
Setting:- Sacramento, CBI headquarters
Title:- Dirty Cop
Plot:- Patrick Jane and the CBI (California Bureu of Investigation) team investigates a death of a young girl. When Patrick Jane suspects the Shierff is a dirty cop, before he could tell Lisbon and the team Jane is taken hostage but using his mind games and closely observing his surroundings is able to give Lisbon and the CBI team a headups of his where a bouts. But it doesn't stop there, Jane finds an anonymous parcel on his desk with a note reading: "Let the games begin"...
Outline:-
Begining:- A young girl is found dead by a young lady during her morning run, Patrick Jane and the CBI team are on the case to find the reason for this young girls death and most importantly the killer.
As the investigation proceeds, Jane has a strong feeling that something is not right in the CBI headquarters but decides to keep his thoughts to himself until he believes his feeling is right. Throughout the investigation working together with the CBI team, Jane has come to a conclusion that there is someone within the investigation that is purposely making mistakes within the investigation and tells Agent, Teresa Lisbon.
Now, with the idea of someone ruining the chances of solving the investigation, Lisbon informs the team to work carefully. Jane working his magic finds out that the Shierff is working together with an anonymous individual but before Jane could reach Lisbon to inform her about the Shierff, he is knocked out from behind.
Middle:- Waking up with a major headache, Jane looks around, tries to move his hands to find it his cuffed to a pole, trying to focuss Jane tries his best to remember what had happen to him but before he could come to a possible solution, he hears a cry from across the room. A young girl. Jane hears a car pull up, he closes his eyes and pretends that he is still unconcious. He hears footsteps. Door unlocks. Footsteps comning down the stairs. He listens out to hear the voice of this person and to his suprise it is the voice of the Shierff.
"Stop your crying sweetie. Do you want to end up like your friend?" The shierff laughs.
Jane hears sounds of footsteps coming closer and closer towards him.
However, back at CBI headquaters Lisbon is curious of the whereabouts of Patrick Jane, constantly calling his cellphone. Asking Van Pelt, Cho and Rigsby if they've seen him. Lisbon checking her phone once again, realises she had miss calls from Jane. Checking her voicemail she finds a clue to where Jane could be.
Jane had left Lisbon a message but before he could finsh his sentence she hears a thumb and the Shierff's voice. Thinking back to what he had told her about 'someone' messing with the investigation it is not long before Lisbon click that the Shierff is the insider.
Lisbon and the team working on finding Jane, back at the basement Jane is talking with the young lady across the room trying to get some information about her and the story behind the death of her friend.
The Shierff is gun down, Jane uncuffed.
"What took you so long" he asks Lisbon
Heading back to headquarters for questioning.
Ending:- The Sheriff is taken back to the CBI headquarters for questioning but the team cannot get anything out of him. From a hardworking town Sheriff to a quiet and 'in his own world' the team is worried about him. Whilst this is happening the girl from the basement, Ana, is in shock, trying her best to tell Jane what she can remember. In the end, after making the CBI teams work difficult, The Sheriff mutters something with a dirty grin on his face. A frustrated Lisbon slams her hands on the table ,
"So now you want to talk?"
With that dirty grin on his face, he mutters
"This is just the beginning, we're just getting started"
Confessing to the murder of the young girl, the Sheriff is taken to the cells. Jane still seriously thinking about what the Sheriff said in the questioning room, he sees a parcel on his desk, walking back to the office he sees a brown parcel on his desk with a note reading: "Let the games begin"...
End of story.
Characters:-
Main Characters:
Patrick Jane
Teresa Lisbon
Shierff Hardy
Co-Characters:
Grace Van Pelt
Kimball Cho
Wayne Rigsby
Lina (Victim)
Friday, 20 July 2012
Lavinia's Final Fan Fiction
It was a bright and early morning; the birds were singing
and the smell of fresh hot cinnamon rolls had taken over in the Bidwell-Sacramento
River State Park, it was just like every other ordinary morning. But for one
individual this was a morning she will never forget.
“AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!”
Birds flapping their wings carelessly scared out of the
trees, people within the park have come to a halt
“It’s a body, a dead body”
Hours later, Senior agent Teresa Lisbon and the CBI team
have arrived on site together with the Sacramento Police Department. The body
laid on the green grass helpless, her colour faded with a twisted rope tied
around her neck. All of sudden a the sound of a car engine approached the crime
scene, it stopped, the car door opened then closed
“Good Morning isn’t it Lisbon” Jane greeted the Senior
Agent
“Oops, not for her, she must’ve had a bad night” he sarcastically
adds on
Lisbon rolling her eyes, gets up from the body and
explains to Jane the situation and that supposedly it could have been a
suicide. But Jane was positive that it was more than a suicide
“No, this was a cover up, the rope doesn’t match the size
of the bruising around her neck and there is signs of struggle” Jane clearly
stated out
It was like Lisbon was told dogs could talk, her face
full of surprise and shock she questioned Jane’s observation
“You’ve only been here a minute and you got all that from
just a glimpse of the victim. Are you sure?!”
Before Jane could answer he was cut off
“This could be nothing?” Lisbon added
Jane shrugged his shoulders and turned to the Sheriff
“What do you think Sheriff?”
“Well…well…well…”
Before the Sheriff could finish off his answer Jane turns
round to Lisbon
“There you go, the Sheriff isn’t sure therefore there is
more to this than meets the eye”
The Sheriff looking at his fellow police officers with confusion
did not argue with Jane’s answer and continued to keep the public off the crime
scene. Back at CBI headquarters, the investigation continued but Jane had a gut
feeling that something was not right
“There is something fishy here.” He suggested
Lisbon once again looked at Jane with a confused look
“It’s an investigation, we don’t have all the answers so
of course there something not right, we don’t know who the killer is”
As the team works hard to find the answer to the murder
of this young lady, they come across an old file that was similar to their investigation.
The feeling of getting closer to the answer the team informed Lisbon about
their findings, and Lisbon set off with Cho, Rigsby and Van-Pelt to get to the
bottom of this. But Jane had other thoughts.
Walking towards the CBI kitchen area he got random flash
backs when he was a so called ‘medium’ and remembered that he had come across a
mother of one of the young girl who supposedly committed suicide. He remembered
that the mother explained her daughter was full of joy and loved everyone
around her, she did not see any signs of depression or behavior that her
daughter could be unhappy.
It was a light bulb had been turned on in Jane’s head, he
quickly walked back to Van-Pelt’s desk and printed out the old files found on a
killer called ‘One Stop Killer’. Searching through all the old folders about
these murders he came across a photo at one of the crime scenes. In the
background of the picture he came across something odd.
“I knew it” He sprung
Jane quickly grabbed his phone out of his pocket
*Lisbon’s answering machine* “This is Teresa Lisbon…”
Jane replies “Lisbon, I have something…”
“…Please leave a message and I shall get back to you as
soon as possible” the answering machine continued
*SMACK*
With continuous thumping like pains in his head, Jane
tries to remember what had happen, he feels cheeks pressed against the solid,
ice cold concrete, he slowly opens his eyes. Vision blurry, he swiftly gets up
to find that his hands are tied to a pipe. He looks around only to discover
that he was kidnapped. Continuously shaking his head he finally became aware of
his surroundings.
“Where am I?” Jane queried
Suddenly Jane could hear a vehicle pull in. The car door
slammed and the sound of footsteps was approaching briefly. Jane watching the
door like a tiger watching his prey, the basement door opened. Rusty brown
coloured boots appeared; step by step the body of this anonymous individual
appeared.
Jane keeping his eye on the individual, he approached
Jane but his face was covered by the shadows, he took his cigarette out of his
mouth tossed it towards Jane, crouched down in front of him
“Sheriff??” Jane said with disbelief
Back at headquarters, Lisbon had found clues left behind
by Jane as well as the photo at the crime scene the Sheriff standing in the
distance off duty. Without hesitation Lisbon and the team rushed to find Jane
and the Sheriff.
Jane enquired “Why me? What are going to do with me”
“You’re in the way” the Sheriff furiously replied
Basement doors open, two heads pop from under the doors
“HANDS UP!”
Shocked the Sheriff gripped on to Jane putting the gun to
his head
“LISBON!” Jane yelled out
*BANG BANG*
Lisbon pulled the trigger, piercing two bullets through
the Sheriff’s leg, Jane running towards Lisbon, Van-Pelt walks speedily towards
the Sheriff but before she could reach him, he gave Van-Pelt a defiant smirk,
place the gun to his head
*BANG*
Back at the CBI headquarters, they are close the case
with the Sheriff accused as the young girls killer, when Jane noticed a brown
box package on his desk, he walks over only to find a mysterious note which
reads
“This is only the beginning.
J”
Word Count: 990
Brian's Final Fan Fiction
"What do we do now?!"
"Na'vi people are going to take over the whole land soon!!" all the marines yelling.
Human world were attacked by Na'vi race so many times because Na'vi people wanted to extend their land. So many of marines were killed by Na'vi. Humans kept trying to defeat them but they were too strong and too big. Also marines didn't have information about Na'vi people and Na'vi people were too fast as well. They dodge every missiles.
"Let me handle this!! I'm Jake Sully and I've been planning for this" suddenly one of the marine shouted.
"I've an idea to defeat Na'vi clan and I have a reason to defeat Na'vi"
"What is it" marine leader said
"Neytiri who broke my left arm and killed my younger brother when I was child"
Jake shared his ideas to other marines and they agreed it. When he was on avatar, he's been training by himself. He knows about the Na'vi clan and Neytiri.
"Just wait until I get chance to get close to Neytiri...."
"then everything goes easy.."
Luckily Jake found a woman who is Neytiri's mother and she was hunting. Jake was watching quietly. Suddenly giant creatures came out and attacked Neytiri's mother. Then Jake shoots the arrow at creatures and saved her.
"Who is it?!" she was in panic
"Calm down...I'm Jake Sully and a human."
"Why did you save me! you monster!"
"I'm not going to hurt you..I want to become one of you.."
"Can you please take me to your homeland?..." Jake carefully said
She became calm and took Jake to her homeland. All the Na'vi people were interesting in Jake and some other people were staring at him. Neytiri came to Jake and express gratitude and ask him why is he here.
"I'm human but I betrayed them and I want to become one of Na'vi."
"I really want to learn the way your life..."
"We can't just trust him!! What if he betray us later?" some Na'vi people shouted.
"Well..the only thing I can say is..I don't have a my own human body.." Jake lied.
Now Na'vi people think Jake was telling the truth and they trust Jake a bit because he saved the clan leader. All the Na'vi agreed Jake to be one of them and Neytiri was told to teach him the language and the way to live. Jake's plan goes well as he planned. Neytiri also taught him how to fight against humans. Jake told all the marines about Na'vi people fighting skills.
"We have to use poison gas to defeat Na'vi"
"Na'vi people nose is very sensitive, so their weakness is poison gas"
"....Then we can take down them easily and save our world"
As day passed...Neytiri became to love Jake but she sensed something is going wrong. She started to doubt him and she found out that Jake lied to Na'vi but she was in love with Jake already so she couldn't tell her clan about Jake. She was keeping the secret by herself. She also knew that Jake is going to kill her soon....
"After I killed Neytiri..spread the poison gas everywhere."
"Then we can defeat them all and we will win!!" Jake said proudly.
Na'vi people were busy training and Neytiri's mother is the only one who can leads Na'vi clan but Neytiri's mother thinks Neytiri can leads the clan now so she gave all the relics to Neytiri. Jake was get angry every time when he sees Neytiri but he had to keep his expression inside.
Now Jake was hiding top of the trees and shoot the arrow when Neytiri was walking by herself then Jake came to Neytiri. She is dead. Jake was just talking to her.
"Remember me? you killed my younger brother and broke my left arm when I was child"
"I've been waiting for today..I feel pain whenever I see you... but I finally did REVENGE"
"You don't deserve becoming Na'vi leader."
"Goodbye"
When Neytiri was found, it was too late. Na'vi people were shocked and realized that Jake killed her. They were angry and rage. Suddenly, blue capsule dropped from sky. Na'vi frightened but don't know what it is and then poison gas coming out from the capsule.
"RUN!!!Hold on your breathe! It's a poison gas" one of the Na'vi said.
"It's the sky people! they started to take us down!"
"It's Jake!!! He betrayed us, he lied to us at the beginning!!!"
All the Na'vi people fall down and their homeland was getting ruined by marines. It was unexpected attack. Some other Na'vi people who are alive, they were trying to fight against them but there were too many of them. Humans took over the homeland and Jake says....
"We did it...my plan was successful.."
"I did revenge"
"Now we can live peacefully..without war..no more fighting..no more hiding.."
Word Count : 809
"Na'vi people are going to take over the whole land soon!!" all the marines yelling.
Human world were attacked by Na'vi race so many times because Na'vi people wanted to extend their land. So many of marines were killed by Na'vi. Humans kept trying to defeat them but they were too strong and too big. Also marines didn't have information about Na'vi people and Na'vi people were too fast as well. They dodge every missiles.
"Let me handle this!! I'm Jake Sully and I've been planning for this" suddenly one of the marine shouted.
"I've an idea to defeat Na'vi clan and I have a reason to defeat Na'vi"
"What is it" marine leader said
"Neytiri who broke my left arm and killed my younger brother when I was child"
Jake shared his ideas to other marines and they agreed it. When he was on avatar, he's been training by himself. He knows about the Na'vi clan and Neytiri.
"Just wait until I get chance to get close to Neytiri...."
"then everything goes easy.."
Luckily Jake found a woman who is Neytiri's mother and she was hunting. Jake was watching quietly. Suddenly giant creatures came out and attacked Neytiri's mother. Then Jake shoots the arrow at creatures and saved her.
"Who is it?!" she was in panic
"Calm down...I'm Jake Sully and a human."
"Why did you save me! you monster!"
"I'm not going to hurt you..I want to become one of you.."
"Can you please take me to your homeland?..." Jake carefully said
She became calm and took Jake to her homeland. All the Na'vi people were interesting in Jake and some other people were staring at him. Neytiri came to Jake and express gratitude and ask him why is he here.
"I'm human but I betrayed them and I want to become one of Na'vi."
"I really want to learn the way your life..."
"We can't just trust him!! What if he betray us later?" some Na'vi people shouted.
"Well..the only thing I can say is..I don't have a my own human body.." Jake lied.
Now Na'vi people think Jake was telling the truth and they trust Jake a bit because he saved the clan leader. All the Na'vi agreed Jake to be one of them and Neytiri was told to teach him the language and the way to live. Jake's plan goes well as he planned. Neytiri also taught him how to fight against humans. Jake told all the marines about Na'vi people fighting skills.
"We have to use poison gas to defeat Na'vi"
"Na'vi people nose is very sensitive, so their weakness is poison gas"
"....Then we can take down them easily and save our world"
As day passed...Neytiri became to love Jake but she sensed something is going wrong. She started to doubt him and she found out that Jake lied to Na'vi but she was in love with Jake already so she couldn't tell her clan about Jake. She was keeping the secret by herself. She also knew that Jake is going to kill her soon....
"After I killed Neytiri..spread the poison gas everywhere."
"Then we can defeat them all and we will win!!" Jake said proudly.
Na'vi people were busy training and Neytiri's mother is the only one who can leads Na'vi clan but Neytiri's mother thinks Neytiri can leads the clan now so she gave all the relics to Neytiri. Jake was get angry every time when he sees Neytiri but he had to keep his expression inside.
Now Jake was hiding top of the trees and shoot the arrow when Neytiri was walking by herself then Jake came to Neytiri. She is dead. Jake was just talking to her.
"Remember me? you killed my younger brother and broke my left arm when I was child"
"I've been waiting for today..I feel pain whenever I see you... but I finally did REVENGE"
"You don't deserve becoming Na'vi leader."
"Goodbye"
When Neytiri was found, it was too late. Na'vi people were shocked and realized that Jake killed her. They were angry and rage. Suddenly, blue capsule dropped from sky. Na'vi frightened but don't know what it is and then poison gas coming out from the capsule.
"RUN!!!Hold on your breathe! It's a poison gas" one of the Na'vi said.
"It's the sky people! they started to take us down!"
"It's Jake!!! He betrayed us, he lied to us at the beginning!!!"
All the Na'vi people fall down and their homeland was getting ruined by marines. It was unexpected attack. Some other Na'vi people who are alive, they were trying to fight against them but there were too many of them. Humans took over the homeland and Jake says....
"We did it...my plan was successful.."
"I did revenge"
"Now we can live peacefully..without war..no more fighting..no more hiding.."
Word Count : 809
Carolyns Final Fan Fiction
From the moment I layed eyes on Indi I knew she was the one I was going to spend the rest of my life with.
My heart skips a beat, gliding up the aisle, barfoot in the hot sand, her blonde hair shimmering in the sunlight, my pulse quickens...I can't talk my eyes off of her. Her beauty is indescribable, I can't believe I am lucky enough to marry this woman that I am so madly inlove with.
Xavier my best man nudges me and winks..."You lucky, lucky man!"
"I will love you forever Indi, you take my breath away" I whisper in her ear as she stands next to me.
"I do" Indi says. "I do" I say with the biggest grin on my face.
Walking hand in hand down the aisle now a married couple we are surrounded by loved ones and their is so much excitement in the air it feels as though we've infected everyone with our happiness and love.
Ruby, my best friend stands out to me in the crowd, her eyes are bloody red and puffy. She doesn't smile at me as I walk past and I can see anger and regret written all over her face...I don't understand why.
There's no time to go see Ruby as we make our way to our getaway car, whatever it is I'm sure she's fine and I'll see her when I get back.
"Bye love's you have a great time on your honeymoon" Irene shouts over the crowd. We wave goodbye and the wind sweeps our hair back as we drive off.
"Are you ready Mrs Smith?" "I can't wait Mr smith" Indi winks at me as she's smiling. At this moment in time in our open convertible with the most stunning bride I am the happiest new groom in the world!
We step out into the warm tropical air, excited to have a few days of alone time together. We arrive in our suite and I cannot resist Indi anymore.
We lie in each others arms completely relaxed and watch the sunset over the horizon.
"It's so beautiful Romeo I wish we could stay here longer"
"I know it's out of this world" I pop a bottle of champagne and we savour what little time we have left on this beautiful island.
A week of passion and romance goes by so quick and before we know it we're back at home in Summer Bay. I go to the Irene's cafe to catch up with everyone and I wonder where Ruby is, I did text her to meet today.
"Irene have you seen Ruby she was meant to meet me here today?"
"No love, to be honest I haven't seen her since the wedding, it's almost like she's been hiding away"
I decide to go see her at home and on the way there I see her sitting on the beach by herself, her arms wrapped around her legs looking out to the sea in deep thought.
"Hey Rubz!"
"Oh hi Romeo I didn't realize you were home already"
"You knew I was back I texted you to meet today"
"Sorry Romeo I just don't feel well at the moment I'll see you sometime later ok"
And with that Ruby walks off and I don't know whats going on, I haven't done anything wrong and it doesn't make sense the way that she's been acting towards me.
I get home and Indi can see in my face that I'm not happy.
"Whats wrong you look a bit shocked?"
"I'm so confused it feels like Ruby is avoiding me and she's not herself I'm really worried about her"
"How about I go see her tonight and try talk to her, she might open up to me if it's more of a girl thing you know?"
"Thanks babe that would be great, she's just not being herself"
After dinner Indi goes to visit Ruby and I hope that she can find out whats been bothering her. I wake up on the couch and look at the time, jeez it's two in the morning...I check in our bedroom and I don't see Indi, I check outside for the car and it's not there. She must have stayed over night with Ruby guessing they must have had a few wines together.
I wake up in the morning check my phone and there's no calls or text's from Indi, there's a text from Ruby...'I have always loved you, I'm so sorry'. I call Ruby and there's no answer. I start panicking this doesn't make sense what is Ruby sorry about?
The hospital calls and Indi's been taken into intensive care. They won't tell me yet what has happened but it's not good. I start sweating and my heart is hurting, I feel like the world has collapsed beneath me.
The love of my life is not going to make it...I fall into a ball on the ground...the pain is unbearable...I can't breathe. I don't want to move or do anything because it will be real then.
What happened? Why is Ruby sorry?
My heart skips a beat, gliding up the aisle, barfoot in the hot sand, her blonde hair shimmering in the sunlight, my pulse quickens...I can't talk my eyes off of her. Her beauty is indescribable, I can't believe I am lucky enough to marry this woman that I am so madly inlove with.
Xavier my best man nudges me and winks..."You lucky, lucky man!"
"I will love you forever Indi, you take my breath away" I whisper in her ear as she stands next to me.
"I do" Indi says. "I do" I say with the biggest grin on my face.
Walking hand in hand down the aisle now a married couple we are surrounded by loved ones and their is so much excitement in the air it feels as though we've infected everyone with our happiness and love.
Ruby, my best friend stands out to me in the crowd, her eyes are bloody red and puffy. She doesn't smile at me as I walk past and I can see anger and regret written all over her face...I don't understand why.
There's no time to go see Ruby as we make our way to our getaway car, whatever it is I'm sure she's fine and I'll see her when I get back.
"Bye love's you have a great time on your honeymoon" Irene shouts over the crowd. We wave goodbye and the wind sweeps our hair back as we drive off.
"Are you ready Mrs Smith?" "I can't wait Mr smith" Indi winks at me as she's smiling. At this moment in time in our open convertible with the most stunning bride I am the happiest new groom in the world!
We step out into the warm tropical air, excited to have a few days of alone time together. We arrive in our suite and I cannot resist Indi anymore.
We lie in each others arms completely relaxed and watch the sunset over the horizon.
"It's so beautiful Romeo I wish we could stay here longer"
"I know it's out of this world" I pop a bottle of champagne and we savour what little time we have left on this beautiful island.
A week of passion and romance goes by so quick and before we know it we're back at home in Summer Bay. I go to the Irene's cafe to catch up with everyone and I wonder where Ruby is, I did text her to meet today.
"Irene have you seen Ruby she was meant to meet me here today?"
"No love, to be honest I haven't seen her since the wedding, it's almost like she's been hiding away"
I decide to go see her at home and on the way there I see her sitting on the beach by herself, her arms wrapped around her legs looking out to the sea in deep thought.
"Hey Rubz!"
"Oh hi Romeo I didn't realize you were home already"
"You knew I was back I texted you to meet today"
"Sorry Romeo I just don't feel well at the moment I'll see you sometime later ok"
And with that Ruby walks off and I don't know whats going on, I haven't done anything wrong and it doesn't make sense the way that she's been acting towards me.
I get home and Indi can see in my face that I'm not happy.
"Whats wrong you look a bit shocked?"
"I'm so confused it feels like Ruby is avoiding me and she's not herself I'm really worried about her"
"How about I go see her tonight and try talk to her, she might open up to me if it's more of a girl thing you know?"
"Thanks babe that would be great, she's just not being herself"
After dinner Indi goes to visit Ruby and I hope that she can find out whats been bothering her. I wake up on the couch and look at the time, jeez it's two in the morning...I check in our bedroom and I don't see Indi, I check outside for the car and it's not there. She must have stayed over night with Ruby guessing they must have had a few wines together.
I wake up in the morning check my phone and there's no calls or text's from Indi, there's a text from Ruby...'I have always loved you, I'm so sorry'. I call Ruby and there's no answer. I start panicking this doesn't make sense what is Ruby sorry about?
The hospital calls and Indi's been taken into intensive care. They won't tell me yet what has happened but it's not good. I start sweating and my heart is hurting, I feel like the world has collapsed beneath me.
The love of my life is not going to make it...I fall into a ball on the ground...the pain is unbearable...I can't breathe. I don't want to move or do anything because it will be real then.
What happened? Why is Ruby sorry?
Carolyns fan fiction draft
Based on the Australian television series Home and Away
Title: Deadly Love
Plot of the story:
The story is written through Romeo's point of view. Indigo Walker (Indi) and Romeo Smith who are deeply inlove with each other get married. They have a very romantic honeymoon and you can see that they are meant to be together. Ruby Buckton is Romeo's best friend and during the wedding Romeo notices that Ruby's been crying and is not being herself. He tries to visit Ruby when he gets back from his honeymoon but she doesn't hang around long enough for him to talk to her. Indi suggests going to talk to her after dinner one night but doesn't return. We find out that Ruby has been inlove with Romeo for a very long time and when Indi doesn't return from a visit back from Ruby's and ends up in hospital we begin to wonder what really happened that night.
Characters:
Indigo Walker
Romeo Smith
Ruby Buckton
Introduction:
The introduction is the wedding scene and goes in detail of the love that Romeo has for Indi. It's a romantic beginning and you goes into detail how Romeo see's Indi through his eyes. It mentions that Romeo see's Ruby very upset during their wedding but doesn't have time to talk to her then and decides to do so when he returns.
Middle:
Indi and Romeo have arrived to their honeymoon destination. They have a few nights together in an island paradise and I elaborate on how much they are enjoying themselves.
Ending:
The newly married couple arrive back home after their honeymoon. Romeo tries to meet up with Ruby but finds her on the beach, he tries to talk to her but she doesn't say much and walks off. He talks to Indi about it when he gets home and she suggests she goes to talk to Ruby. When Indi doesn't return that night Romeo isn't too worried but get's a shocking call from the hospital the next morning. Indi is in intensive care and won't make it. Romeo did receive a text from Ruby saying that she's always loved him and that she's so sorry, he can't get hold of her and starts to wonder if Ruby could have had something to do with Indi's death.
Title: Deadly Love
Plot of the story:
The story is written through Romeo's point of view. Indigo Walker (Indi) and Romeo Smith who are deeply inlove with each other get married. They have a very romantic honeymoon and you can see that they are meant to be together. Ruby Buckton is Romeo's best friend and during the wedding Romeo notices that Ruby's been crying and is not being herself. He tries to visit Ruby when he gets back from his honeymoon but she doesn't hang around long enough for him to talk to her. Indi suggests going to talk to her after dinner one night but doesn't return. We find out that Ruby has been inlove with Romeo for a very long time and when Indi doesn't return from a visit back from Ruby's and ends up in hospital we begin to wonder what really happened that night.
Characters:
Indigo Walker
Romeo Smith
Ruby Buckton
Introduction:
The introduction is the wedding scene and goes in detail of the love that Romeo has for Indi. It's a romantic beginning and you goes into detail how Romeo see's Indi through his eyes. It mentions that Romeo see's Ruby very upset during their wedding but doesn't have time to talk to her then and decides to do so when he returns.
Middle:
Indi and Romeo have arrived to their honeymoon destination. They have a few nights together in an island paradise and I elaborate on how much they are enjoying themselves.
Ending:
The newly married couple arrive back home after their honeymoon. Romeo tries to meet up with Ruby but finds her on the beach, he tries to talk to her but she doesn't say much and walks off. He talks to Indi about it when he gets home and she suggests she goes to talk to Ruby. When Indi doesn't return that night Romeo isn't too worried but get's a shocking call from the hospital the next morning. Indi is in intensive care and won't make it. Romeo did receive a text from Ruby saying that she's always loved him and that she's so sorry, he can't get hold of her and starts to wonder if Ruby could have had something to do with Indi's death.
Sarah's fan fiction draft
In the beginning...
Outline - Hermione has at last returned to finish her 7th and final year at Hogwarts after the War between Voldermort, with her two friends Ron and Harry. Hermione is announced head girl and draco is her partner for the year as head boy. As they work together they acknowledge each others differences and at last admit their unspoken love for each other.
Characters - Hermione, Draco, Ron and Harry
Hermione - shocked and angered by draco being headboy, as the story deepens, she realizes that draco is the one she truely loves and struggles to come to terms with her feelings for him after their hateful relationship they both shared with each other while attending Hogwarts.
Draco - Draco has always had hidden, secret feelings for Hermione throughout their time at Hogwarts. He concealed his feelings as his father and family would have looked down upon their relationship and his feelings for her as she is a muggle born, "mudblood"
Ron - At first Ron is not worried about the amount of time Hermione has to spend with Draco to assist in the Head of the School duties, but as the story deepens he realizes and suspects that Hermione as fallen for someone else.
Harry - Hermione confides in harry her new found feelings for Draco and asks for advice and to not tell Ron. Faced with the dilemma of keeping this importantly huge secret from his bestfriend Ron, and also finding out the shocking news the Hermione has feelings for his former school vival, Harry finds it hard to know which way to turn.
Writing point of view : Hermione Granger
INTRO - Starts off with point of view of Hermione Granger. Initially shocked and disgusted with the news that Draco Malfoy has been awarded Head Boy and will be spending most of his spear time with her due to Head's of the school duties.
MIDDLE -
END -
I bolted off the Hogwarts Express as soon as it came into a halt outside the school that I would now be leader of with my fellow arch rival Draco Malfoy. I could hear Ron and Harry yell after me as i stormed my way through the crowd towards the warmth of my welcoming dormitory.
Outline - Hermione has at last returned to finish her 7th and final year at Hogwarts after the War between Voldermort, with her two friends Ron and Harry. Hermione is announced head girl and draco is her partner for the year as head boy. As they work together they acknowledge each others differences and at last admit their unspoken love for each other.
Characters - Hermione, Draco, Ron and Harry
Hermione - shocked and angered by draco being headboy, as the story deepens, she realizes that draco is the one she truely loves and struggles to come to terms with her feelings for him after their hateful relationship they both shared with each other while attending Hogwarts.
Draco - Draco has always had hidden, secret feelings for Hermione throughout their time at Hogwarts. He concealed his feelings as his father and family would have looked down upon their relationship and his feelings for her as she is a muggle born, "mudblood"
Ron - At first Ron is not worried about the amount of time Hermione has to spend with Draco to assist in the Head of the School duties, but as the story deepens he realizes and suspects that Hermione as fallen for someone else.
Harry - Hermione confides in harry her new found feelings for Draco and asks for advice and to not tell Ron. Faced with the dilemma of keeping this importantly huge secret from his bestfriend Ron, and also finding out the shocking news the Hermione has feelings for his former school vival, Harry finds it hard to know which way to turn.
Writing point of view : Hermione Granger
INTRO - Starts off with point of view of Hermione Granger. Initially shocked and disgusted with the news that Draco Malfoy has been awarded Head Boy and will be spending most of his spear time with her due to Head's of the school duties.
MIDDLE -
END -
I bolted off the Hogwarts Express as soon as it came into a halt outside the school that I would now be leader of with my fellow arch rival Draco Malfoy. I could hear Ron and Harry yell after me as i stormed my way through the crowd towards the warmth of my welcoming dormitory.
Brian's Fan Fiction Draft
Short Plot : Jake Sully is on alien body which is called an avatar and also looks exactly the same as Na'vi race. He found out his younger brother's death and it was Neytiri who killed him and broke Jake's legs and left arm in the past. He decides to revenge on her and pretending like he's one of Na'vi clan fighting against humans.
Characters : Jake Sully , Neytiri
Jake Sully : Courageous, determines, passionate. He lost his legs and left arm and his younger brother when he was a child. He begins to plan how to defeat Na'vi people. He misses his brother so much. He feels pain whenever he sees Neytiri face. There were so many comrades who died during the war. Therefore he decides to take down Na'vi world.
Neytiri : Neytiri is brave, loyal and strong willed. She is willing to put herself in a dangerous situation for the sake of her clan. She realizes that Jake was a traitor the the Na'vi, not the Sky people but she was loving Jake so she couldn't tell her clan about him and couldn't attack him. Her parents are good leaders but her father died during the war between the humans and Na'vi. She believes that her mother is the only one who can leads Na'vi clan.
Beginning : Human world were attacked by a giant Na'vi race. They just wanted to take over the whole land so they can extend their land. Humans and Na'vi people had a war many times and so many marines were killed. Marines kept trying to defeat Na'vi and protect the world but they were too weak to beat them. Na'vi took so many things away from humans and especially Jake Sully. There's a marine Jake Sully who has been planned to defeat the Na'vi and planned to revenge on Neytiri.
Middle : Jake only can uses his right arm but when he is on avatar, he got his own legs and own arms as well. When he was on avatar, he saved Neytiri's mother once on purpose so he could get close to Na'vi people and especially Neytiri. He told them that he's a human and he betrayed humans. Na'vi people were shocked but they trust him because he told them the truth and he saved Neytiri's mother who is a clan leader. Neytiri was told to teach Jake how to fight against humans and as day passed she became to love Jake.
Characters : Jake Sully , Neytiri
Jake Sully : Courageous, determines, passionate. He lost his legs and left arm and his younger brother when he was a child. He begins to plan how to defeat Na'vi people. He misses his brother so much. He feels pain whenever he sees Neytiri face. There were so many comrades who died during the war. Therefore he decides to take down Na'vi world.
Neytiri : Neytiri is brave, loyal and strong willed. She is willing to put herself in a dangerous situation for the sake of her clan. She realizes that Jake was a traitor the the Na'vi, not the Sky people but she was loving Jake so she couldn't tell her clan about him and couldn't attack him. Her parents are good leaders but her father died during the war between the humans and Na'vi. She believes that her mother is the only one who can leads Na'vi clan.
Beginning : Human world were attacked by a giant Na'vi race. They just wanted to take over the whole land so they can extend their land. Humans and Na'vi people had a war many times and so many marines were killed. Marines kept trying to defeat Na'vi and protect the world but they were too weak to beat them. Na'vi took so many things away from humans and especially Jake Sully. There's a marine Jake Sully who has been planned to defeat the Na'vi and planned to revenge on Neytiri.
Middle : Jake only can uses his right arm but when he is on avatar, he got his own legs and own arms as well. When he was on avatar, he saved Neytiri's mother once on purpose so he could get close to Na'vi people and especially Neytiri. He told them that he's a human and he betrayed humans. Na'vi people were shocked but they trust him because he told them the truth and he saved Neytiri's mother who is a clan leader. Neytiri was told to teach Jake how to fight against humans and as day passed she became to love Jake.
End : Jake learned everything about Na'vi and got the information about Na'vi clan. After he got informations, he was hiding top of the trees and shoot the arrow at Neytiri then ran away. She died and then all the Na'vi people are shocked and they are panic. Now they are in danger.
Lavinia's five fiction links
My links are:
1. CSI: Miami
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In this story, Horatio, the protagonist has finished a night run and cools off on the beach across his condo where he lives. He is taken hostage by a anonymous group of men and taken to a some what prison cell where he believes he has no hope of escaping. However, Horatio, having no badge, gun or his cell phone to try contact his team as well as being drugged, he finds the strength with in him, using what he has on him to leave traces for his team of his whereabouts. He then feels around the cell for any clues to where he is held hostage. His hands tied, he is able to free his wrists and slowly finds his way to the bed provided and rests.
The story worked well catching the readers attention in the first paragraph. Throughout the story, the writer begins to explain too much of what is happening and therefore confuses the reader. It is clear to us that Horatio is taken hostage but it is not clear where he was taken hostage from, the author mentions something about the beach where Horatio rested but does not clearly explain this. She includes that Horatio can not see and refers that it is pitch black, but why is it pitch black? Is he blind folded or have something over his head? There could be many reasons why it is pitch black but she does not tells the reader. There is also some parts within this story that seems quite odd such as Horatio finding a bucket to pee?? As well as sucking his blood after freeing his hands from being tied behind him. However, it is clear that Horatio is taken hostage without his team knowing and the author also descriptively describes the characters and their movements.2. The Simpsons
3. The Mentalist
This story works well because it keeps the reader thinking about the situation that the characters are in and what would have happen if Lisbon did not show up. Not only did they write this Fan Fiction but they also include the reader to ponder on the question "what if...". They did well explaining Patrick Jane's reaction to the situation and letting the reader know how he felt descriptively.
4. Body Of Proof
In this story, the author does a very good job describing the plot, scene and the characters. The story is very well written and makes you hope that the team will find Megan. The action happening in this story is described will by the author and makes you join in the hype in a way. The only thing I did not like is that the author decided to make the villan, James Thorne, to kill Megan and the team. There is no victory at the end of the story. Maybe the author knows that everyone will expect a happy ending so she decides to take them by suprise and give an unexpected ending.
5. The Ghost Whisperer
This story works well because the author makes it sound very real to the point where you can actually picture what they are telling. They describe the scene very clear and merges the characters together and has you wanting more. The storyline goes very well with the series 'Ghost Whisperer' and includes very interesting moments that makes your feelings bubble. A very good read overall.
Brian's Five Fan Fiction Links
My links are
1. Avatar
The story line was worked well because the author explained and described well about from the first scene. It explained well what humans want from Na'vi and why they want it. Also described about why Na'vi had to protect their own land.
2. X-men First Class
In this story, before Chales Xavier and Erik Lensherr got the names Professor X and Magneto, they were young and discovering their powers for the first time. They weren't enemy each other, working together with other mutants to stop the threat the world has ever known. Charles and Erik have assembled a team that inclues Mystique, Banshee, Beast, Angel, Havok and Darwin. Meanwhile. the malevolent Sebastian Shaw planned to plunge the world into war with the help of villainous mutants. However, Charles and Erik stopped Shaw and then Charles and Erik clash, setting the stage for Professor X to lead the X men in the fight for good, Magneto the Brotherhood spread chaos and destruction on a global scale.
The story line was worked okay because the author tell us the differences between the humans and mutants and show us why humans trying to stop the mutants.
3. Fantastic 4
In this story, a scientist named Dr.Reed Richards has discovered there is a radio active cloud in the space. He decides to ask his old friend, Viktor VonDoom for access and Susan Storm who is a scientist and pilot Johnny Storm and last Ben Grimm expert pilot. but everyone exposed to the cloud, especially Ben is hit the worst because he was sent outside to put something to the cloud. The DNA of all five of them begins to react differently. Susan gains invisibility, Dr.Reed can stretch his whole body, Johnny can control fire, Ben is transformed into a solid rock and Von Doom's body changes into metal. Von Doom goes crazy and trying to get more power and the other four trying to stop him.
The story line was easy to understand because five of them got super power and after they got the power, they changed, one goes crazy and other four trying to stop him. Power can be used any ways.
4. Thor
Thor, a powerful but arrogant warrior whose reckless actions reignite an ancient war. Thor is banished to Earth, where he is forced to live among humans and lost his power. When the most dangerous villain of his world sends its darkest forces to invade Earth, Thor learns what it takes to be a true hero.
Worked okay but I quite don't understand how he could control power when he was in the earth after his lost his power. Simple story and he learned many things when he's on the earth.
5. Incredible
Superhero Bob Parr who has not settled into suburban life along with his wife and kids under the watchful eye of the superhero protection programmer. They were forced to be hiding but superhero Frozone and Parr secretly helping people. Parr's family is like any other with some powers. His daughter has ability to become invisible and create force fields at will. His son can run at incredible speeds. His wife is known in super circles as Elastigirl. Bob gets a summons to show up at a remote island to train, which he promptly accepts. Bob's family saving the world from Syndrome, a former fan of Mr.Incredible (Bob Parr).
This story line worked very well because they were forced to be protected by superhero protection programmer. They were rare people but their role is to save the world, not hiding.
1. Avatar
In this story a human colony has been established on a distant planet called Pandora. The humans are hunting for a rare mineral that could solve the ecological crisis on earth. However their plans are ruined by indigenous race called Na'vi. To get a rare mineral, humans sent ex-marine Jake Sully out into the piloting an Avatar a remote control alien body that will allow Jake to breath the air on Pandora. An Avatar looks exactly the same as Na'vi race so Jake can get close to Na'vi easily and gain trust. As Jake discovered new world of the Na'vi, he was in danger because of giant creatures attacking but Na'vi woman saved him. He fell in love with a beautiful Na'vi woman named Neytiri, who saved him before and taught him about their races and their lives. After that he realized how much this world is important to the Na'vi and he faught to protect his new race against humans and saved Pandora.
The story line was worked well because the author explained and described well about from the first scene. It explained well what humans want from Na'vi and why they want it. Also described about why Na'vi had to protect their own land.
2. X-men First Class
The story line was worked okay because the author tell us the differences between the humans and mutants and show us why humans trying to stop the mutants.
3. Fantastic 4
The story line was easy to understand because five of them got super power and after they got the power, they changed, one goes crazy and other four trying to stop him. Power can be used any ways.
4. Thor
Worked okay but I quite don't understand how he could control power when he was in the earth after his lost his power. Simple story and he learned many things when he's on the earth.
5. Incredible
This story line worked very well because they were forced to be protected by superhero protection programmer. They were rare people but their role is to save the world, not hiding.
Sarah's five fan fiction links
My links are on Harry Potter fan fiction :
1. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Draco and Hermione
This story, based and structured around the events that occured throughout the original Harry Potter series, describes a scene where Draco is consoling a heart broken Hermione. Progressing towards the end of the story you become aware of the secret relationship that has flourished between the pair and that she has cheated on Ron. Not only were Ron and Hermione planning a wedding that has now been called off, hermione is also pregnant with Draco's baby.
The story line worked well because the author structured the ongoing events in relevance to the original book. The descriptive language used was at an age level suited to 17 years and above and also made the read more enticing. I thought that overall the short story had an interesting twist and liked how the author created a dramatic ending leaving me wanting to read more.
2. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Ted's First Christmas
This story is about the resulting after effects of the dealths of Andromeda's husband, daughter and son in law. Now caring for her daughters son, she is consumed with the constant reminder of her daughters death. Being to proud to ask for help, and also hating the pity that the weasleys and potter showed her, she was determined to live alone and in solitude. Harry was not only friends with lupin and Nymphadora, but is also the godfather their son Teddy. This story results in Harry asking if Andromeda and Teddy would like to spend Teddy's first christmas with Harry and his friends and family, Andromeda eventually saying yes. The twist is whether Andromeda truely wants to spend christmas with company or alone.
I found this story lacking any depth or descriptive language. The story line was not very interesting as the author wrote a very undramatic ending. Throughout the short story, the author described and explained the grief Adromeda felt for her family's deaths well.
3. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Truth or Dare
This story is baed on the older generation of characters in the original Harry Potter books. Sirius creates a game called truth and dare between his friends at Hogwarts. These friends include Harry Potter's parents and also remus and peter. This game consists of all participants answering all truths honestly as the magic that Sirius used to make the game does not allow people to lie. Dares are to be done without refusal or the participants are dismissed from the game. The story ends with James being dared to stand on the ravenclaw tables and pretend he is one of them.
The author structured this story in a way that made it easy to read and also flow easily. I found this story fun and enjoyable. There was less use of descriptive language in this story but more use of speech and quotes from the characters. To improve this short story the author could use more descriptive and emotive language.
4. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Hermione's Last Year At Hogwarts
This short story is about the last year of Ron, Harry and Hermione at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. The story starts with the point of view of the character, Hermione Granger. The war between the wizardry world is over and all is getting back to normal, hermione is setting out for her last year at Hogwarts. She receives a letter in the mail informing her that she has been selected to be the new head girl at her school. During the short story she explains her break up with ron and how he left her for lavender brown. As she hops onto the train to go to her scheduled metting with Ms Mcgonagall to be told of her duties as head girl she realizes that her former enemy Draco Malfoy is partnering with her as Head Boy.
I found that the author explained and described this story well, and liked how they used the point of view of hermione granger. The story could have been for carefully written and some of it did not make much sense, but i liked how there was a twist to the end, leaving me wanting to read more.
5. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - A Granger
This story is about Ron, Hermione, Ginny and Harry in their adult lives with there children many years after the wizard war. The short story sets at the Potter's house where ron is playing outside in the backyard with the children. Harry arrive back from the ministry in time for a family dinner and also help aid Ron in the battle that was accuring. Hermione arrives from the ministry later than Harry bearing happy news to share to the family. Sitting down at dinner she explains that not only does Hogwarts (School of Witchcraft and Wizardry) have weasleys and potters attending the school, but also her dads brother and cousin olivia will be attending Hogwarts in the next year. She has the pleasure to give her cousin her attending letter in person.
I loved how the author started the short story with an immense description of the setting. The language used made the story more interesting and enjoyable to read. The author structured the story well and there it was an easy enjoyable read.
1. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Draco and Hermione
This story, based and structured around the events that occured throughout the original Harry Potter series, describes a scene where Draco is consoling a heart broken Hermione. Progressing towards the end of the story you become aware of the secret relationship that has flourished between the pair and that she has cheated on Ron. Not only were Ron and Hermione planning a wedding that has now been called off, hermione is also pregnant with Draco's baby.
The story line worked well because the author structured the ongoing events in relevance to the original book. The descriptive language used was at an age level suited to 17 years and above and also made the read more enticing. I thought that overall the short story had an interesting twist and liked how the author created a dramatic ending leaving me wanting to read more.
This story is about the resulting after effects of the dealths of Andromeda's husband, daughter and son in law. Now caring for her daughters son, she is consumed with the constant reminder of her daughters death. Being to proud to ask for help, and also hating the pity that the weasleys and potter showed her, she was determined to live alone and in solitude. Harry was not only friends with lupin and Nymphadora, but is also the godfather their son Teddy. This story results in Harry asking if Andromeda and Teddy would like to spend Teddy's first christmas with Harry and his friends and family, Andromeda eventually saying yes. The twist is whether Andromeda truely wants to spend christmas with company or alone.
I found this story lacking any depth or descriptive language. The story line was not very interesting as the author wrote a very undramatic ending. Throughout the short story, the author described and explained the grief Adromeda felt for her family's deaths well.
3. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Truth or Dare
This story is baed on the older generation of characters in the original Harry Potter books. Sirius creates a game called truth and dare between his friends at Hogwarts. These friends include Harry Potter's parents and also remus and peter. This game consists of all participants answering all truths honestly as the magic that Sirius used to make the game does not allow people to lie. Dares are to be done without refusal or the participants are dismissed from the game. The story ends with James being dared to stand on the ravenclaw tables and pretend he is one of them.
The author structured this story in a way that made it easy to read and also flow easily. I found this story fun and enjoyable. There was less use of descriptive language in this story but more use of speech and quotes from the characters. To improve this short story the author could use more descriptive and emotive language.
4. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - Hermione's Last Year At Hogwarts
This short story is about the last year of Ron, Harry and Hermione at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. The story starts with the point of view of the character, Hermione Granger. The war between the wizardry world is over and all is getting back to normal, hermione is setting out for her last year at Hogwarts. She receives a letter in the mail informing her that she has been selected to be the new head girl at her school. During the short story she explains her break up with ron and how he left her for lavender brown. As she hops onto the train to go to her scheduled metting with Ms Mcgonagall to be told of her duties as head girl she realizes that her former enemy Draco Malfoy is partnering with her as Head Boy.
I found that the author explained and described this story well, and liked how they used the point of view of hermione granger. The story could have been for carefully written and some of it did not make much sense, but i liked how there was a twist to the end, leaving me wanting to read more.
5. Harry Potter Fan Fiction - A Granger
This story is about Ron, Hermione, Ginny and Harry in their adult lives with there children many years after the wizard war. The short story sets at the Potter's house where ron is playing outside in the backyard with the children. Harry arrive back from the ministry in time for a family dinner and also help aid Ron in the battle that was accuring. Hermione arrives from the ministry later than Harry bearing happy news to share to the family. Sitting down at dinner she explains that not only does Hogwarts (School of Witchcraft and Wizardry) have weasleys and potters attending the school, but also her dads brother and cousin olivia will be attending Hogwarts in the next year. She has the pleasure to give her cousin her attending letter in person.
I loved how the author started the short story with an immense description of the setting. The language used made the story more interesting and enjoyable to read. The author structured the story well and there it was an easy enjoyable read.
Carolyn's five fan fictions links
My five fan fiction links
1. New Blood
In this story the writer adds a new member to the True Blood series; a younger sister Eve Regan to one of
the main characters Pamela Swynford De Beaufort commonly known as Pam. Eric
Northman is Pam and Eve’s career and their maker who turned them into Vampires. Eve flies out to meet Eric because she can sense his hurt over the death of his maker who had recently committed suicide and she is
distressed because Eric is still very unstable, even going as far as trying to commit suicide himself. Eric realizes that
he cannot leave behind his two Vallmofrö (meaning ‘Poppy seed’ in
Swedish), Vallmofrö is a loving and affectionate term he uses for his Eve and
Pam. Eric is over 1,100 years old Swedish Vampire and he knows he can’t leave them behind
because they still need all his help and guidance like his late maker gave him. He realizes this as he can see the effect his near suicide attempt had on Eve.
2. Love in Paris
This fan fiction story is based around the tv series Desperate Housewife's and it's a spin off about two characters from the show Katherine Mayfair and Robin Gallagher. They finally admit their love for each other even though it's hard because one of the characters Katherine never considered herself to be a lesbian. In this spin off it carries on the story of when the couple move away from their home in America and go to Paris, France. The couple seem happy and in love but Katherine does get jealous when she notice's that the taxi driver is eyeing up Robin. In the end the couple get to their hotel room and the impression that I got from the story was that they seemed excited and happy to be starting there life together.
I liked that the writer did a spin off to what happens after the couple moves to France because as a Desperate Housewife's fan it would be interesting to see how the couple were getting on in their lives and what they were doing. However I felt that the writer could have added more depth and incorporated some other interesting story lines into the plot, perhaps adding other characters from the series into the story. If the plot was deepened I would have been much more interested in the writers fan fiction.
3. What if you woke up and couldn't remember?
This story is based on the Twilight book series. In the first book one of the main characters Bella, ends up in hospital and this fan fiction tells the story of what if she woke up and forgot everything that happened in the last four months. Bella had recently moved in to live with her Dad in a small town called Forks. She had fallen in love with a man called Edward and later he confided in her that he was indeed a vampire. They were inseparable and completely smitten with eachother. After a fight between other vampires and Bella getting seriously hurt in the process she wakes up in hospital and doesn't recognise Edward and doesn't remember the time she spent living with her Dad in Forks.
I like how the writer tells the story from both Bella and Edwards point of view. You can feel the pain that Edward is feeling after Bella doesn't remember him and it's a very emotional reading. As any Twilight fan would know is how intense Bella and Edwards love is for one another and for her not to remember him is very sad. I would like to know what happens further in this story because the writer leaves you hanging because there is the chance that she will remember. This is very good writing from this fan fiction writer.
4. Murder's in Springfield
In this story The Simpsons arch enemy Slideshow Bob is out to kill Bart Simpson the son in the family again after many other failed attempts. Slideshow Bob feels that Bart has ruined his life and wants to put an end to it. As Slideshow Bob breaks into the house he wonders why it's so quiet and as he enters Bart's parents room, he finds Marge and Homer Simpson dead in their bed covered in blood and their throats slit. As he moves further in the house he also finds Bart's older sister Lisa dead with the knife still in her throat. Slideshow Bob hopes that Bart is still alive so he can kill him himself but also finds him dead like the rest of the family, he is delighted over this, however he becomes increasingly curious of who is responsible for the murdering of the Simpson family. As he enters baby Maggie's room he expects to find her dead aswell but instead he finds her alive and crying in her cot. Slideshow Bob runs many scenarios through his head and finally comes to the decision that he can't kill Maggie or leave her there to die and decides to take her home to him and his family. He sets up the house to look as though Homer committed the murders, putting the blame on poor dead Homer. Slideshow Bob escapes in the early hours of the morning with Maggie leaving a house where something terrible had happened and by whom we don't find out.
I really enjoyed this because the writer has taken the usually comedic Simpsons and turned it into a gruesome and chilling thriller. It was very clever to choose the character Slideshow Bob to stumble upon the murder scene just as he was planning to murder Bart Simpson because as a reader it makes you start wondering who the actual murderer was and that the Simpsons might have had another enemy. This is only the first chapter of six chapters that this writer has created and from reading the first chapter I'm engaged in this story and will continue reading the next few chapters.
5. Love after Hogwarts
This story is about what happens after Harry Potter and his friends graduate from Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Like in the ending of the Harry Potter book series Harry and Ginny are together and in this story they are starting a life together as Harry buys himself and Ginny a house for her wedding present. Hermione and Ron who were together in the book series have split up and he has now moved on however there is still that connection between him and Hermione. Hermione is still traumatized and hasn't dealt with the aftermath of the battle between the Dark Lord Voldemort and his followers and the some of the wizardry world fighting for their world against the dark arts. She suffers from these nightmares every night and it's the reason she won't bring any new men to stay with her for the night we think. As the story progresses Ginny, Ron's younger sister who is now married to Harry calls Hermione and says she needs her to come over, she says she thinks she may be pregnant and asks Hermione to do a pregnancy test with her because she's too scared to do it on her own. As they wait for the test results they go out for lunch and during their lunch she gets a phone call from Harry who excitely found the pregannacy test and announces that she's pregnant! Ginny rushes off with the good news to celebrate with Harry and Hermione sets off home. This is when the story heats up because as Hermione walks into her apartment there's a voice from inside saying, "Your late Granger". We found out it's Draco Malfoy who in the book series is there enemy however it gets quite passionate between them as he says that he only wants Hermione in his life.
I really enjoyed this story because at the end it really surprises you and it's a nice twist that it's Draco Malfoy who is Hermione's lover because as you read the story you don't expect this ending. This story was written very well and I like how the writer has played with the origanel ending to this series. I like that the main characters were brought into the plot and I would be interested in more fan fiction to follow from this story. It's an unexpected ending and I would be fascinated to read further into Hermione and Draco's blossoming love.
The blogger has managed to integrate this
new character very well into the original storyline of True Blood. She manages to grasp the character Eric's personality very well within the story and adds Swedish sentences into it which is very true to the character. The story doesn't captivate me enough to read into it further if the writer did decide to do further stories with the new character Eve. There wasn't a big enough plot or any suspense leading me into thinking that something interesting will happen further into the story.
2. Love in Paris
I liked that the writer did a spin off to what happens after the couple moves to France because as a Desperate Housewife's fan it would be interesting to see how the couple were getting on in their lives and what they were doing. However I felt that the writer could have added more depth and incorporated some other interesting story lines into the plot, perhaps adding other characters from the series into the story. If the plot was deepened I would have been much more interested in the writers fan fiction.
3. What if you woke up and couldn't remember?
This story is based on the Twilight book series. In the first book one of the main characters Bella, ends up in hospital and this fan fiction tells the story of what if she woke up and forgot everything that happened in the last four months. Bella had recently moved in to live with her Dad in a small town called Forks. She had fallen in love with a man called Edward and later he confided in her that he was indeed a vampire. They were inseparable and completely smitten with eachother. After a fight between other vampires and Bella getting seriously hurt in the process she wakes up in hospital and doesn't recognise Edward and doesn't remember the time she spent living with her Dad in Forks.
I like how the writer tells the story from both Bella and Edwards point of view. You can feel the pain that Edward is feeling after Bella doesn't remember him and it's a very emotional reading. As any Twilight fan would know is how intense Bella and Edwards love is for one another and for her not to remember him is very sad. I would like to know what happens further in this story because the writer leaves you hanging because there is the chance that she will remember. This is very good writing from this fan fiction writer.
4. Murder's in Springfield
In this story The Simpsons arch enemy Slideshow Bob is out to kill Bart Simpson the son in the family again after many other failed attempts. Slideshow Bob feels that Bart has ruined his life and wants to put an end to it. As Slideshow Bob breaks into the house he wonders why it's so quiet and as he enters Bart's parents room, he finds Marge and Homer Simpson dead in their bed covered in blood and their throats slit. As he moves further in the house he also finds Bart's older sister Lisa dead with the knife still in her throat. Slideshow Bob hopes that Bart is still alive so he can kill him himself but also finds him dead like the rest of the family, he is delighted over this, however he becomes increasingly curious of who is responsible for the murdering of the Simpson family. As he enters baby Maggie's room he expects to find her dead aswell but instead he finds her alive and crying in her cot. Slideshow Bob runs many scenarios through his head and finally comes to the decision that he can't kill Maggie or leave her there to die and decides to take her home to him and his family. He sets up the house to look as though Homer committed the murders, putting the blame on poor dead Homer. Slideshow Bob escapes in the early hours of the morning with Maggie leaving a house where something terrible had happened and by whom we don't find out.
I really enjoyed this because the writer has taken the usually comedic Simpsons and turned it into a gruesome and chilling thriller. It was very clever to choose the character Slideshow Bob to stumble upon the murder scene just as he was planning to murder Bart Simpson because as a reader it makes you start wondering who the actual murderer was and that the Simpsons might have had another enemy. This is only the first chapter of six chapters that this writer has created and from reading the first chapter I'm engaged in this story and will continue reading the next few chapters.
5. Love after Hogwarts
This story is about what happens after Harry Potter and his friends graduate from Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Like in the ending of the Harry Potter book series Harry and Ginny are together and in this story they are starting a life together as Harry buys himself and Ginny a house for her wedding present. Hermione and Ron who were together in the book series have split up and he has now moved on however there is still that connection between him and Hermione. Hermione is still traumatized and hasn't dealt with the aftermath of the battle between the Dark Lord Voldemort and his followers and the some of the wizardry world fighting for their world against the dark arts. She suffers from these nightmares every night and it's the reason she won't bring any new men to stay with her for the night we think. As the story progresses Ginny, Ron's younger sister who is now married to Harry calls Hermione and says she needs her to come over, she says she thinks she may be pregnant and asks Hermione to do a pregnancy test with her because she's too scared to do it on her own. As they wait for the test results they go out for lunch and during their lunch she gets a phone call from Harry who excitely found the pregannacy test and announces that she's pregnant! Ginny rushes off with the good news to celebrate with Harry and Hermione sets off home. This is when the story heats up because as Hermione walks into her apartment there's a voice from inside saying, "Your late Granger". We found out it's Draco Malfoy who in the book series is there enemy however it gets quite passionate between them as he says that he only wants Hermione in his life.
I really enjoyed this story because at the end it really surprises you and it's a nice twist that it's Draco Malfoy who is Hermione's lover because as you read the story you don't expect this ending. This story was written very well and I like how the writer has played with the origanel ending to this series. I like that the main characters were brought into the plot and I would be interested in more fan fiction to follow from this story. It's an unexpected ending and I would be fascinated to read further into Hermione and Draco's blossoming love.
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